Final Project

For my final project, I copy edited and searched for 10 copy editing mistakes on Sidelines.

Copy Edit

I was given sports to copy edit during my hour in the CIM. Not being the biggest sports person, I had to look up a lot of terms in the AP Stylebook, not because I didn’t understand but because sports has its own set of rules compared to “normal” journalism. Many terms that are not usually hyphenated were because they related to sports and, in my case, football.

I learned the rules for numbers change when it comes to sports writing since it heavily relies on numbers for scores, player numbers, etc. Sport articles have more leeway to bend the “normal” rules because it’s a specific topic that needs continuity within itself. I had to read the articles multiple times through and each time I kept finding something new I had missed before. “That” was a popular filler word I had to remove from articles, something that sounds alright spoken but not read.

Sidelines Editing Errors

EpiPen price hike, what it means for everyday Americans

Headline: missing “Opinion:”

Particularly, parents of children with food allergies are rightfully outraged at this price spike. In August, the biggest selling month for EpiPens, 70 percent of prescriptions go to those aged 18 and younger. Due to this dramatic rise, many of those who used to rely on the EpiPen to save their lives or their children’s lives are resorting to using syringes with the medication. This poses an additional problem. It is much harder to measure the correct amount needed to fight an allergy attack. However, it is cheaper than spending hundreds, sometimes over a thousand dollars, on two EpiPens that expire after a year.

Paragraph 3, Line 4 – change “used to rely on” to “relied on”

The controversy has attracted the attention of lawmakers. Sen. Chuck Grassley (R-Iowa) sent a letter to Mylan asking for an explanation of the price increase. Sen Amy Klobuchar (D-Minn.) also sent a letter about the issue, asking the Federal Trade Commission to investigate whether Mylan committed anti-trust violations surrounding EpiPen’s pricing.  The controversy has even pressured Democratic presidential candidate Hillary Clinton to release a plan that will penalize companies if they hike the price of their medication the way Mylan did.

Paragraph 4, Line 3 – a period is missing in “Sen. Amy Klobuchar (D-Minn.)”

When a drug manufacturer like Mylan significantly raises the price of a drug, the response is more like a domino effect. The price hike means that insurers have to pay more for that drug. To cover the cost, they’ll either raise premiums or raise the deductible so that the cost is loaded onto the average consumer. For those who aren’t financially well-off, this means a higher deductible, which makes it more likely that the cost of the EpiPen comes out of their own wallet instead of their paycheck.  Many American families simply cannot afford to repurchase such expensive medication every year, which is required for those using the EpiPen.

Paragraph 7, Line 8 – omit the word “simply”

Zeta Tau Alpha raises money for cancer research with Think Pink Week

Headline – ‘Think Pink Week’ needs quotations

According to a recent press release, Zeta members hosted their annual “Kiss Away Cancer” event on Nov. 2 as part of “Think Pink Week.” During the event, students put on pink lipstick and kissed the sorority’s banner that will be hung from their house on Greek Row as the sorority  passed out pink ribbons for students to wear.

Paragraph 3, Line 4 – “will be hung” should be “would be hung”

“Pink week is a great way to bring the entire Greek community together. Everyone has been affected by cancer in some way,” said junior community and public health major Emilee Cole. “Zeta Tau Alpha has always been good at putting together such fun events, and although it is a sad topic, ZTA helped to shine light on breast cancer awareness while raising money to donate to cancer research.”

Paragraph 6, Line 1 – Capitalize “Week”

MTSU receives ‘red light’ rating for restricting free speech

MTSU was issued the poorest rating for student free-speech rights by the Foundation for Individual Rights in Education, also known as, FIRE, on Nov. 1.

Paragraph 1, Line 2 – “also known as FIRE,”

MTSU ‘sneakerheads’ share their expensive shoe obsessions

“Initially, a sneakerhead wants to cop their grail and grow their collection along the way,” says Stoudemire. (“Cop your grail” means to buy one’s rarest, most prized possession. I’ll be explaining a lot more sneaker lingo throughout this story.)

Paragraph 5, Line 3 – Remove “I’ll be explaining a lot more sneaker lingo throughout the story,” because this isn’t a first person narrative.

“$1,000 a year is a very low estimate, because if you don’t get the newest Air Jordans the day they come out, for example, you will have to deal with the hype,” Stoudemire says of his annual spending. “Hype” refers to the stiff competition of obtaining a shoe after the first day it’s sold, which results in a higher expense. “Hypebeasts” are sneakerheads who buy any sneaker just to say they have them.

Paragraph 6, Line 1 – spell out “One thousand dollars”

 

 

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